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advancements of technology can reduce crime rates do you agree or disagree

#advancements #technology #crime #rates
Some
people
 believe that developing technologies are extending and it leads to
distinction
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a distinction
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 between
affluant
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affluent
affluence
 and the rabble.
While
 others
against
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are against
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this
 point.
This
essey
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essay
 will discuss
firstly
 causes why it is increasing and
secondly
 will discuss
decreasing
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the decreasing
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of
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apply
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reasons . On the one hand ,Currently ,In developed and developing
country
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countries
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 technologies are spreading and it helps to separate
people
such
 as rich and underprivileged
layers
 of
society
 .
Technology
produce
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produces
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modern
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a modern
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 product like air conditioner, microwave electric car and other tools
that
is
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are
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need
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needed for
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 human's life and only rich personal can afford to buy them Actually ,
technology
 is enhancing
day
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itself day
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 by day and
produce
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produces
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 modern
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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bu
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but
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according to
 modernity their price is
extremly
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extremely
 expensive and very few
people
 are able to buy them .Especially , poor
layers
 of
society
 cannot purchase
due to
 low
salary
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salaries
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.If the rich work for remunerative they can buy them and they are able to purchase
another things
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another thing
other things
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.
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,in our country highly -educated
personal
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personnel
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 are paid eight hundred dollars per month .So that
affluant
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affluent
affluence
 easily buy
electric
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an electric
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 car air conditioner.
On the other hand
, of
course
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 everyone has not
modern
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a modern
the modern
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 car and modern tools but it
doesnt
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doesn't
 determine or separate rich and poor
personal
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personnel
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.Nowadays
the
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most ordinary
people
 have
smartphone
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smartphones
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 and
computer
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computers
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.Only
internet
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the internet
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 or
wesite
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websites
 help to enhance
to
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individuals they open up doors to tools that
mayli
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may
 help the poor
to
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apply
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earn money
easier
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more easily
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.
Moreover
,they can learn languages or run
own
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their own
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business
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businesses
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.
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,In the prior day ample
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ancestors
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ancestor
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ancestors
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 achieved a lot of
succesess
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success
successes
 without
technology
 .I think
technology
doesnt
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doesn't
 related to
be
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being
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 rich and poor ,it
related
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is related
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 to movement and intelligence .Because
technology
 was created by
person
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a person
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 not
opposite
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the opposite
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 .Really it
help
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helps
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 to facilitate our
works
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work
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.
To
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 conclusion ,
distinction
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the distinction
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 between
affluant
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affluent
affluence
 and underprivileged
layers
 of
society
 is decreasing because of developing
technology
 .I think
intelegent
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intelligent
person
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people
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 can achieve everything that they want .In the future
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,
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I
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can
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cant
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can't
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 say that poor
layers
 of
society
 will decrease fully but they can
found
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find
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 their way using
technology
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