The graph on the rigth shows the amounts spent on clothes on the Internet in the USA and Japan between 1999 and 2003. Write a report for a university lecturere describing the information shown

The graph on the rigth shows the amounts spent on clothes on the Internet in the USA and Japan between 1999 and 2003. Write a report for a university lecturere describing the information shown
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The graphic shows the data of cash spent on online shopping clothes in the United
States
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and
Japan
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from 1999 to 2003. They
also
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always share the same trends in a few years.
To begin
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, within 1999,
states
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in the graphic show money spent all below $12,000,000 but
Japan
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was $5,000,000 ahead of the online payment.
However
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, The amount increased in the following year in
Japan
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and America,
both
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had nearly the same amount in 2000 which is approximately $10,000,000. In
both
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countries,
this
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trend dropped in around 2001 to just below $10,000,000. The number of cash used in
Japan
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and the United
States
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of America increased drastically to approximately $15,000,000 in around 2002 and
both
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states
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share moderately the same number.  After 2003 New Year's Eve,
both
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countries still pay almost the same number to purchase apparel online.
To sum up
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, the trend is generally increasing, except for the extremely dropping events in around 2001.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words states, japan, both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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