The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
table presents the sum of the tourists to Ashdown Museum before and after the refurbishment.
Besides
, these charts represent the satisfactory level of the travellers in
the
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terms of their
visting
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visiting
period. Here, we can see that
clearly
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the number of
the
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tourists in total increased after the
year
of reconstruction.
Moreover
, the
satisfactory
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level is seen higher as well in the surveys. The dissatisfactory level is seen
declined
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after refurbishment. The
year
before reconstruction the statistics of visitors were 74000 in total per
year
while
the data is shown inclined to 92000 just the next
year
of It's upgradation. A direct impact can be seen. In the surveys, people were mostly dissatisfied previously compared to the following years of improvement. Only 15% and 30%
visitors
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were satisfied and very satisfied respectively before
where
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40% and 35%
is
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the percentage Later.
Afterward
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, the sum of very disappointed
have
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halven
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halved
halves
but the percentage of No response remains the same.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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