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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts
illustrates
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 data about
USA
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US
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 couple and separated rates between the period of 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of adult American in two years.
Overall
, the
rate
 of married persons
are
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is
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 gradually
decgreased
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decreased
 in
given
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a given
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 period of time.
Firstly
, the number of
separation
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separations
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 is gradually reduced when
its
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apply
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compared with 1980 to 2000.
The another
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Another
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 highlited point is the total count of marriage
rate
also
steadly
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steadily
 reduced from 1980 to 2000. In 1970 and 1980 there is
constant
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a constant
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rate
in
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for
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married
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a married
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rate
that is
 2.5
millions
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million
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.
Moreover
, the
rate
 of
separates number
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separation
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 in
USA
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the USA
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 always came
on
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to
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 almost 50 % of that
year
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year's
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 marriage.
secondly
,
the
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apply
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1970 is compared with 2000 the living together is
heigh
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high
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on
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in
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 that period.
The
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apply
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20 % of adults didn't
married
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marry
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 in 2000 and the percentage is
little
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a little
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 increase when
its
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apply
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compared with 1970. on the
othe
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other
 side, in 1970 and 2000 the separated
rate
 and widowed
rate
also
 came on below 10
percent
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per cent
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 only.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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