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People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. what are the causes of this problem? How lo overcome il?

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Nowadays, we hear a lot about work-life balance in our society, ev Another issue that has affected the balance is job culture. In recent times,
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countries have implemented a law of 40 hours per week for working profers a week.
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 are burdened with tasks and asked to stay late regularly to finish work.
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 to improve their health and provide sufficient time to their loved
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. In conclusion,
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money and working culture
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 the most common factors restricting people to not
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 a balanced life. In my opinion, a little discipline
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support from the government can allow people to have a better lifestyle, so they can spend more time with family and friends.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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  • for example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: The equilibrium between personal life and career work.
  • Burnout: Physical or mental collapse caused by overwork or stress.
  • Time management: The process of organizing and planning how to divide your time between different activities.
  • Financial pressures: Economic demands that might force someone to prioritize work over personal life.
  • Overcommitting: Taking on more responsibilities than one can handle.
  • Technological advancements: Innovations in technology that make it easier to stay connected to work outside of office hours.
  • Societal expectations: Cultural norms and beliefs that influence people's behavior and decisions.
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