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Both men and women these days work full-time, so it is logical for them to share household chores equally. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#men #women #work #household #chores
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In contemporary society, it is true that both
men
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 and
women
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 need to
work
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 full-time so it is right for them to
share
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 the
household
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chores
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 equally. In my opinion, I totally agree with
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 issue. The first reason is that
women
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 keep an important role in society these days. In the past,
women
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’s biological capacity for child-bearing was proposed to explain their limit in social activities,
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, they are expected to stay at home in order to do the
chores
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 and raise kids only.
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, nowadays,
women
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 have achieved respect for themselves and are able to
work
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 in the same place as
men
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, vote with
men
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 and are considered rightfully equal to
men
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.
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 could lead to the fact that
women
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 are sharing financial
burden
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burdens
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 with their
husband
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 and they experience the same stress at
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,
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, it might be fair and logical for them to
share
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household
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chores
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 equally to avoid putting too many responsibilities on one person. The second reason is that sharing
household
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chores
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 could be an ideal behaviour for raising their child. As
women
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 used to be responsible for doing
household
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chores
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 alone, in order to change these stereotypes in the next generations, parents could be the reasonable factor by providing essential habits and models for their children.
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, the boys would learn how to support and
share
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work
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 with the girls as they grew up in an equal and fair family. In conclusion, I believe the idea that it is beneficial to
share
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household
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chores
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 equally in today’s society
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 the aforementioned reasons.
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