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Many people believe that it’s better to learn something in a group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that
group
 learning is more beneficial and effective as compared to learning alone. I strongly agree with
this
 view. First of all,
group
 learning brings together individuals from various backgrounds and culture which allows them to freely share ideas, thought and knowledge. Learning in a
group
 builds the confidence of the individuals, helps them to be outspoken and boosts their self-esteem . Being in a
group
also
 has the benefit of diversity of views and brainstorming ideas together which makes studying faster and quick comprehension.
For example
, for a
group
project
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project,
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 each team member will share different ideas, endowed with unique skills , some may be apt at critical thinking,
while
 others at creative thinking,
thus
 yielding good work performance.
Furthermore
,
group
 learning fosters teamwork experience, and it is time efficient. When tasks are equally divided, each individual works to carry out their given task,
thus
 saving time and energy.
However
, there are drawbacks to
this
 method of learning. There is unequal participation among
students
.
For instance
,
students
 who are introverted will find it difficult to have conversations with other
group
 members and will lack motivation to participate fully in
group
 activities.
Also
, they tend to procrastinate and hide behind those who are hardworking.
Students
 are at risk of procrastinating and are less likely to be held accountable for not duly carrying out required tasks. In conclusion,
group
 learning is still a very effective method of teaching even though, there are some negative effects to it. Each individual is different, more practical methods can be put in place to accommodate
students
 and their differences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative problem-solving
  • exchange of ideas
  • peer support
  • social interaction
  • fosters
  • enrich
  • perspective
  • motivate
  • isolation
  • feedback
  • misconceptions
  • self-paced
  • retention
  • self-discipline
  • lifelong learning
  • customization
  • engagement
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