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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. #development #village #ryemouth

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. #development #village #ryemouth
#development #village #ryemouth
The figure illustrates the transformation of the Ryemouth village from 1995 until now.
Overall
, a comparison of the maps reveals that the village has totally transformed from
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a fisherman
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fisherman
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fisherman's
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 village to a modern neighbourhood. In terms of the island prior to the development, the farmland and forest park
replaced
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were replaced
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 with
golf
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a golf
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 and tennis
area
. Across
this
 open
area
, they constructed a new path to the west and it
surrounded
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was surrounded
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 by new and old housing. Regarding the changes in the centre, the markets near the beach converted
to
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into
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 other buildings. The shop
area
made
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was made
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 into a restaurant
area
,
while
 the fish market which
located
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is located
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at
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on
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 the opposite, developed into apartment towers. In the East of
these
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this area
these areas
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area
, a new car park has been added near the hotel building.
Lastly
, the cafe
remain
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remained
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 the same and the fishing port was removed.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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