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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, we are living in a world always more international where many foreign
people
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 travel to other countries to know other cultures and places.
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 creates problems, some
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 believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs but others think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. In
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 essay, I will explain both statements and I will try to give the pros and cons.
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, I believe that it’s very important to travel for many reasons,
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 you can know different
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 as the cookery and lifestyle.
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, a lot of
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 agree about
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 and they are very cheerful because
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 instance, English tourists come to Italy, they must follow our
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. In my opinion, there is a huge difference between the English and Italian lifestyles, for ,instance we eat in the evening
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 in England don’t eat and they must follow our
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 it’s very difficult.
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, for a Chinese or a Japanese discover new
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 can be very hard because they don’t speak the Italian language and the writer is totally different from them.
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, some
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 believe that they should live
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 life without problems to lead their culture,
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 in the kitchen. In conclusion, the controversy surrounding visitors adhering to local customs versus embracing cultural differences has far-reaching implications.
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 following host country conventions can avoid offence and hostility. It may
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 lead to the contraction of diversity. Ultimately, promoting respect, understanding, and mutual appreciation should be the ideal approach in an increasingly interconnected world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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