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Some people believe that group learning is more beneficial and effective as compared to learning alone. I strongly agree with this view.

#people #group
First of all,
group
 learning brings together individuals from various backgrounds and culture which allows them to freely share ideas, thought and knowledge. Learning in a
group
 helps the student to be outspoken and builds their self-esteem. Being in a
group
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also
 has the benefit of diversity of views and brainstorming ideas together which makes studying faster and good
compre
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compare
.
For example
, in a
group
 of 6, each person will share different ideas, reasoning,
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 skills and some may be apt at critical thinking,
while
 others at creative thinking, collectively good work performance is achieved.
Furthermore
,
group
 learning fosters
team work
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 experience and it is time efficient. When tasks are equally divided, each individual works to carry out their given task,
thus
 saving time and energy.
However
, there are drawbacks to
this
 method of learning. There is unequal participation amongst students,
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 learning
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.
For instance
, students who are introverted will find it difficult to have conversations with other
group
 members and will lack motivation to participate fully in
group
 activities which results in the team being less effective and productive. In conclusion,
group
 learning is still a very effective method of teaching even though, there are some negative effects to it. Each individual is different, more practical methods can be put in place to accommodate students and their differences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative environment
  • discussion
  • debate
  • exchange of ideas
  • critical soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • emotional and motivational support
  • isolating
  • personalized pace
  • efficient learning
  • self-discipline
  • accountability
  • educational progress
  • distractions
  • group dynamics
  • commitment
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