The government should lower the budget on the arts in order to allocate more money to education.To what extent do you agree? Please try to write at least 250 words.

In twenty first century
the
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education
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plays
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a vital role in
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citizens
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citizen's
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life and even though, the skills
such
as painting, music, sculpture, and literature
are playing
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play
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important
role
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roles
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in
people
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people's
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lifes
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lives
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because they are stress relief
activites
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activities
for individuals. Few folks think that the administration must allocate more funds to
education
than
in
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the arts. I believe that
education
is more important than arts, because having a degree
make
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us financially stable, helps in the development of
society
, and
it
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hepls
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helps
us to achieve dream goals ,it build character and
also
improves confidence.
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,
education
plays a key role
to get
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in getting
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sucess
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success
, because graduation provides a
finacialial
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financialize
security life by doing
jobs
in the technical
feild
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field
, when we
compared
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to
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it to
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illiterate
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jobs
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jobs
are paying
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more than
the
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physical
jobs
.
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Even more
it
also
helps to advancement in
society
by using the latest techniques, and modern methods to do work.
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instance
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by using modern methods and
equipments
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equipment
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in
agricultural
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the agricultural
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feild
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field
we get more output with less investment
thus
helps to
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helping
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farmer
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farmers
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and
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as well as
the public. Mainly, by schooling we will get the ability to achieve dream goals,
it
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and it
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makes our path smooth to reach our goals.
such
as
doctor
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doctors
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,
scientist
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scientists
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and
also
to evolve in the business.
although
being
an
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uneducated it will be a bit more
dificult
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difficult
to reach our dreams.
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example
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Abdul
kalam
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got
sucessed
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success
in Indian space research despite
of
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his poverty and being
a
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from a
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backward family.
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, it
help
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us to develop good character by understanding the values of
society
such
as social equality among people and
also
we improve knowledge ,
confidence
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and confidence
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by studying new things. In conclusion, I strongly believe that more funds
allocating
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allocated
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in
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to
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education
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the education
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sector assist us to get financially free, progress in
society
, dream
acheiving
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achieving
,and
to
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apply
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have
strong
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a strong
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character.
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