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The line graph shows Paris Metro station passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows Paris Metro station passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph depicts the Paris Metro station public.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that it fluctuated and came back to the same quantity.
Furthermore
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, it showed upward and downward trends throughout the period.
To begin
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 with at 6:00 when it accounted for 100 and increased to 400 between 8 and 9 am.
However
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, it decreased steadily to under 200 at 10 am and rose marginally to 300 before maintaining the same level during the next 3 hours.
Consequently
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, it fell progressively to approximately 50 at 4 pm and depicted a
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rose to 400 at 6 pm and dropped constantly to 100 at 8 pm and fluctuated slowly in the final hours.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • rush-hour peak
  • commuting
  • sharp drop
  • midday
  • gradual increase
  • afternoon peak
  • gradual decline
  • late evening
  • sharp decrease
  • number of passengers
  • reach its highest point
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