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pie chart show main reasons for Immigration and Emigration to/from UK in 2007

pie chart show main reasons for Immigration and Emigration to/from UK in 2007
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The pie charts detail the rationales for immigration to and emigration from the UK in 2007. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that immigration was mainly related to various kinds of
work
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,
study
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, and accompanying someone, with no reasons stated and other less typical. Emigration was
similarly
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 focused on
work
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 (non-definite
work
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 being more prevalent) but formal
study
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 was a less likely reason and less defined reasons were more common. In terms of
study
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 and
work
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, 30% of immigrants came to the UK for definite jobs, just 1% above the number emigrating for the same purpose. The disparity regarding looking for
work
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 was greater (12% for immigration and 22% for emigration) and even more significant concerning formal
study
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 (26% immigrating and just 4% emigrating for school). There was relative alignment for other reasons with 11% immigrating with another purpose and 14% emigrating, comparable to the figures for accompanying another person (15% and 13%, respectively).
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, only 6% of individuals immigrate to the United Kingdom without a reason,
while
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 three times
this
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 figure
emigrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
emigrates
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 lacking a stated purpose.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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