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computer are increasingly used in education in which areas do you think are computers more important in which areas are teachers more important.

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In recent days technologies have become part of everyday life
for example
laptop
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 and mobile phones we use these products at least 4 to 5 times a day.There are several reasons for using the computer and it depends on
person's
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a person's
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 job or studies.The usage of
computers
 for educational purposes has become higher.The
students
 can easily understand and clear their doubts through
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the internet
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internet
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.
In
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 one hand,
technology
 is a
power
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 tool for education.
computers
 make studies to understand in
an
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apply
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easier and the funniest way to
students
. It helps
students
 to get things in an easier way and teach many lessons about life.The
students
 can learn new courses through distance learning or online classes.
For example
,java and C++ are available on various websites free of cost. From another angle, It is accepted that
technology
 is no substitute for a real
teacher
. Primarily,
technology
 should not rely too much on PCs and learn basic skills from their teachers
for instance
 writing abilities by hand should not be forgotten since without a
teacher
 their handwriting or spelling may suffer.
Moreover
, an experienced
teacher
 knows what materials to choose for better learning in any subject and gives it cheaper than an unreliable expensive computer. In conclusion,
technology
 and specifically
computers
 in the education process can enhance a
teacher
's lesson and the effect of both teachers and
computers
 on learning is inevitable. Mainly, institutions should supplement traditional teaching with the use of
technology
as well as
 using traditional sources of information
such
 as books with a proper lecturer
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