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Some people believe that the government should provide free education at all levels. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In contemporary society, the cost of learning at a desired
level
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 is getting more over-priced. So, it is unaffordable for the majority of
people
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 to discover at their
level
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. There is a gigantic belief that the
government
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 should propose a free education to learn at any
level
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. I strongly believe that the
government
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 should organize schools or organizations for
people
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 to learn,
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even although
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although
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though
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 they have financial problems. I should argue that the
government
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 should establish a free education for
people
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 to
study
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 at any
level
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. One of the major reasons is that there are many
people
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 who have financial concerns. They cannot learn at their desired
level
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, because of lack of money. If
people
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 organize a
school
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 or organization, they can
study
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 even though they have financial constraints.
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, in some foreign countries, there are many free learning
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 for the population. So the literacy rates are higher in those states. In doing so, the literacy rates increase.
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, I should
also
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 argue
that
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is
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if
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government
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the government
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 offers a
school
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for
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,for
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 instance, all
people
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 cannot
study
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 in it. So one of the main reasons is studying
of
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rich
people
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 Because there are
people
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 who are wealthy. They have sufficient money to
study
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 at
other
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another school
other schools
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school
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. Those schools should be restricted to them. In doing so, there are
no
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not
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 numerous
people
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 in these schools. Think
this
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 restriction is good for society In conclusion,
firstly
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government
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 should establish a
school
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 or organization for
people
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 who are
an
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incapable of affording to
study
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.
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, there are restrictions to studying for rich
people
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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