Both men and women these days work full-time, so it is logical for them to share household chores equally. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

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the homework. Personally, I agree
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that ladies and
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help each other in the household chores,
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I feel that for two reasons which
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will explore in the following essay.
To begin
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human beings opt to work
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as much as they can, like helping people or serve their
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feel independence,
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they work together that
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them more
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and that lead to a decrease in the household chores, because when men and women share the tasks of the house, life it becomes
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for both,
For example
, My mother and my father have
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job,
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, my mother has the full
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in the morning and my father at the evening and night, through
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each one has their own task without any trouble. Despite
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, there are a number of significant benefits,
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can work without any negative thoughts with household chores and
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children
caring because he divides the whole
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his wife.
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also
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go to her
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with
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clear thinking and no stress.
To conclude
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homework, because that will assist them
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an ingenuity family, In my opinion I believe that
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my point of view.
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