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The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to England who attended four different attractions in Brighton.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to England who attended four different attractions in Brighton.
The graph above shows the percentage of tourist arrivals in Brighton, England in divergent categories.
Overall
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, every category had steady visitors from 1980 to 2010, except the art gallery which gradually lost its popularity from 1985. It's clear that the festival got the most stable tourists coming, but,
consequently
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 it had no significant number rising in thirty years and stuck by nearly 30%.
Moreover
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, since 1980, Pier only had slight increases in tickets sold from 10% to a bit above 20% by the end of 2010.
In addition
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, the Pavilion successfully had its highest amount in 1995
although
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 it slowly decreased in the following fifteen years to around 30%.
However
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, by the end of
2010
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 the gallery scored the lowest proportion amongst all below 10% even though it started at a high number by 1980 at 20%. It
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 reached its peak season in 1985 at approximately 35% before it dropped moderately.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • tourists
  • attractions
  • trends
  • popularity
  • seasonal variations
  • attendance figures
  • locality
  • predicting
  • data analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • decline
  • increment
  • steady
  • plummet
  • surge
  • stagnate
  • benchmark
  • correlate
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