You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make 

comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words
The diagram shows the process of manufacturing carbonated drinks.
Overall
,
producing
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the production
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of carbonated drinks
consist
Correct subject-verb agreement
consists
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of 5 stages, which are
water
cleaning, heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing, filtering and filling, and packaging. In the first
stage
, raw
water
is filtered and softened by adding chemicals.
Then
, the
water
is heated and cooled in a pipe prior to carbon dioxide gas
is
Wrong verb form
being
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injected to create the fizziness of the drink.
This
is the second
stage
of the process. The third
stage
involves mixing the carbonated
water
with various ingredients,
such
as colouring, syrup, and flavours. The mixture is
then
filtered again to remove any impurities. In the fourth
stage
, the drink is filled into bottles or cans using a machine. The final
stage
is packaging and delivering the drink to the market. The bottles and cans are packed into boxes and loaded onto trucks.
Then
, they are transported to supermarkets where they are sold to consumers.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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