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You recently took a long vacation. In your absence, a friend did you a huge favor. Write a letter thanking your friend. In your letter: Explain what the favor was Describe how this favor helped you Offer compensation

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Dear Porter Simmons Warm wishes I hope that you find yourself in a fit and sound health. I am writing
this
 letter to express my gratitude for the help you have offered me
while
 I was off duty
due to
 a long illness. As I fell sick at the most crucial time of the university examination and had to be hospitalised in order to fully recuperate, your presence and your taking over my duty as an examination head was a blessing for me . Because I had no added pressure on my mind, it definitely helped me in getting a speedy recovery as I was mentally free from the burden of the work. I have heard you have managed extremely well from arranging the benches , assigning the duties to sub-ordinates to distributing the question papers on time.
Also
, I have come to know that you were too cooperative to say no to. I am falling short of words and what could I do to make you see how thankful I am ?Would you mind coming over and having a fine supper followed by a chit-chat session ? I am keen to hear a yes from you. Yours truly Avinash
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greeting and closing
The closing could be more formal and express appreciation more effectively.
task response
The letter lacks a clear response to the task and needs to elaborate more on the compensation offered.
coherence and cohesion
The organization of ideas and use of linking words could be improved for better coherence and cohesion.
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