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Band 4

Some people think that a high salary is important when choosing a company to work for, while others think that a good working atmosphere is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Defenetely
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Definitely
high
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a high
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 salary is important, but with
good
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a good
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work
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 atmosphere
is
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it is
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 much
easyer
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easier
 to reach aims. Both views have
chance
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a chance
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 to live, still let's
analise thouse
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analyse those
 thots and choose one
wich
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which
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 will
work
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 for me. We need
money
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 to live. The more
money
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 you have
the
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, the
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 better
live
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apply
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you can live.
Money
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 gives you benefits
such
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 as
comfort
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a comfortable
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appartmen
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apartment
,
good
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a good
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 car,
helthy
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healthy
 food and
higher
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a higher
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 level of
timespending
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time spent
 outside your
work
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. But earning only the
money
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 could be a problem
on
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the longterm
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longterm
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long-term
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 perspective
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becouse
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because
 your
butgets
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budget
getting
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is getting
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 higher, but as a
person
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person,
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 you can stop
to grow
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growing
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 at some point
and
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, and
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this
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 could lead to problems with your mentality. I mean your job
coud
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could
 become boring to you, so
this
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 could make you sick, or even worse
lead
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, lead
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 to
depresion
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depression
.
Ofcourse
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Of course
 you will have
money
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 to pay some specialist that can help you with
this
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 issue, but it is all about time
and
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, and
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 your inside
resorses
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resources
wich
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which
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 are limited at some point. The time you could spend with family or friends will be
spend
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spent
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 on preparing you to earn more
money
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. It is
pleasure
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a pleasure
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 to have
good
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a good
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 relationship with your
coulege
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college
.
Than
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Then
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 it is not a big deal to fix some problems at
work
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,
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becouse
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because
 you are thinking
same
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the same
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 way and it is much
easyer
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easier
 to get to
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a sertain
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sertain
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certain
 point. Doesn't matter how
mutch
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much
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 you earn for
month
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a month
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 when
this
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 month
feel
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feels
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 like
year
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a year
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 of
work
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. And
thas
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that's
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 really cool when you can expect help from
ather
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other
 workers
and
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, and
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 you can feel no guilty about that. The
think
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thing
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 I'm trying to tell is that with good teamwork you can
acheve
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achieve
 more goals and have much more
goodvibes
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good vibes
 working,
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becouse
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because
 the
work
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become
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becomes
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 not
work
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 but something deeper than just doing staff to earn
money
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. So, my opinion on
this
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 topic - I would rather do a lot of tasks side by side with good
couleges
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colleagues
 and
good
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a good
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 working atmosphere, than have
high
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a high
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 salary. The thing is that
money
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are
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is
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 good, but to share emotions with friends is
batter
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better
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! I choose to be happy at
work
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,
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becouse
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because
 it is
large
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a large
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 part of my life
and
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, and
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 I don't want to spend
this
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 time thinking only about the
money
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 and
way
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apply
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how to spend
them
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it
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.

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structure
Try to set a clear plan before you write. State your view in one simple sentence at the start, then talk on both sides, and end with your own clear choice.
grammar
Keep ideas simple and short. Use one idea per sentence and link ideas with simple words like 'and', 'but', 'so'.
content
Give a short example for each point. Use a real example from life to show your idea.
tone
You share a real view and a clear personal aim.
content
You try to discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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