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the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs beneath indicate the total of British graduate and postgraduate students who choose between part-time work, voluntary work,
further
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 study or become unemployed in 2008. As we can see from the representation we are excluding from the charts any kind of full-time work. In the first plan, the total number of graduate pupils is higher than the number of
postgraduates
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, as shown in the graph below.
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, the most quoted destination for a student who just got a degree, with a total amount of 29,665 scholars, is staying in school for more years.
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, a good quotation of graduates, around a value of 17 thousand, are settling on a part-time job, yet the same sum of former students are now unemployed. In the second diagram, the trend of
postgraduates
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 choosing their future occupation is comparable to the one above.
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, the majority are picking to keep on studying,
similarly
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, 2,535
postgraduates
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 are opting for a part-time occupation.
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, only 345 students are pursuing a path in volunteering, compared to the 3,500 in the graph of the destination of UK graduates.
Nonetheless
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, even a significant number of
postgraduates
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 are still looking for a job.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words postgraduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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