The table below shows the estimated literacy rates by region and gender for 2000-2004.

The table below shows the estimated literacy rates by region and gender for 2000-2004.
The table depicts the
proportion
of
male
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and
female
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females
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and estimated literacy
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region between 2004 and 2004.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the Americas obtained the highest percentage of folk,
while
Africa
lowest.
Furthermore
,
Europe
had the largest
proportion
of
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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,
whereas
Africa
lowest.
To begin
with, males in the America and Oceania shared a similar
proportion
, namely 94.1% and 94.2 %. In terms of
Europe
, it accounted for 99,2 % ,
whereas
Africa
only 71,6 %. There was a negligible difference between
World
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and Asia, 87,2 % and 85,9 %. The figure for females in
Africa
obtained the smallest
proportion
of females throughout the period, namely 53,9 %.
Consequently
, in Asia females accounted for 72,5 %
while
in
Europe
almost 98,5 %. With regards to
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, Oceania obtained 93,4 %
both
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genders and
Africa
only 62,5 %.
However
, in the
World
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they were 82,2 %,
while
in
Europe
approximately 98,8 %.
Therefore
, the USA was the country with the biggest percentage of
public
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only after
Europe
. In terms of the USA , it had 93,6 % ,
while
Asia
roughly
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79,3 %.
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