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The bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three given schemes demonstrate which type of vehicle individuals preferred and how much
time
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 they spent to get to their destination in European countries.
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,
obviously
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,obviously

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 in
Denmark
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,Denmark

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 people travelled longer distances than
other
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in other

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 countries and the majority of citizens commuted by private car regardless of the area. Meanwhile, the British travelled by public transport and bicycles the least,
however
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, their commuting
time
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 was the highest compared to other countries. People
that
Correct pronoun usage
who

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 live in Denmark
chose
Wrong verb form
choose

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 private automobiles if they
wanted
Wrong verb form
want

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 to get somewhere and they
spent
Wrong verb form
spend

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb spent. Consider changing it.

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 12000
kilometres
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 per year, which was almost twice as many as the Spanish spent travelling on the same type of vehicle. There were similar patterns concerning the
time
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 spent travelling by any kind of transport in Germany and Spain, which accounted for approximately 8000
kilometres
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 yearly by car and almost 1200
kilometres
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 per year by public vehicles. Meanwhile, the EU average regarding the usage of public transport constituted the same amount of
kilometres
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 as in Germany and Spain, namely about 1200
kilometres
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 yearly. The commuting
time
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 was the highest in the UK and in Germany, specifically, approximately 47 minutes per day, which was more than 15 minutes more than
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.
time
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 in Spain and in Europe on average.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, kilometres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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