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The bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three given schemes demonstrate which type of vehicle individuals preferred and how much
time
 they spent to get to their destination in European countries.
Overall
,
obviously
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 in
Denmark
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 people travelled longer distances than
other
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in other
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 countries and the majority of citizens commuted by private car regardless of the area. Meanwhile, the British travelled by public transport and bicycles the least,
however
, their commuting
time
 was the highest compared to other countries. People
that
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who
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 live in Denmark
chose
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choose
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 private automobiles if they
wanted
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want
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 to get somewhere and they
spent
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 12000
kilometres
 per year, which was almost twice as many as the Spanish spent travelling on the same type of vehicle. There were similar patterns concerning the
time
 spent travelling by any kind of transport in Germany and Spain, which accounted for approximately 8000
kilometres
 yearly by car and almost 1200
kilometres
 per year by public vehicles. Meanwhile, the EU average regarding the usage of public transport constituted the same amount of
kilometres
 as in Germany and Spain, namely about 1200
kilometres
 yearly. The commuting
time
 was the highest in the UK and in Germany, specifically, approximately 47 minutes per day, which was more than 15 minutes more than
this
time
 in Spain and in Europe on average.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, kilometres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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