The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make relevant comparisons.

The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make relevant comparisons.
The graph illustrates the amount of
shops
which have been closed and stores that have been started for business in one country from 2011 to 2019. In 2011 , most of the
shops
started to work and the popularity of opening new
shops
was on top.
besides
that
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,that
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there were about 65000
shops
that closed at that time. Over the period of 2012 to 2014 , it presented an uptrend in opening
shops
that increased from 40000 to 60000 but on close shope it was a stable trend same as previous. Close stores have fallen to about 5000
that is
the smallest number in years. In the next few years, we see a stable trend which
is fluctuated
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between 3000 and 6000. In conclusion, the open stores had been highest decrease in total and closed
shops
had
lower
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a lower
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fell in comparison to closed
shops
.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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