In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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new in
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several ways, in their advertisements. There is
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion ,I consider it that
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positive, and
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negative develop.   First of all, real development
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the type of company, which tells us if they are honest or not.
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, the new facility promotes
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is not true.
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famous people who just want money in general, they don’t care about the value of products. But you should
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trust them or listen to them,because they don't care if the products are good or not. Another point to consider, new businesses on the second
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advertising, which
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people, but, in the best, there were no ads, they just
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a posters
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it, no day is it easy if you want to be successful business.
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called Ahmed,
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starts his job in November,
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social media.
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been one of the most influential in his business. I will give you small advice. You should try population again and again to be
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person. In conclusion, dissipate having different
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, I strongly believe that, the advertisement benefits us, and encourages the community to know what we can do, but not always.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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