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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#businesses #emphasise #products #development
There is no denying the fact that advertisements
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these days,
while
 is a commonly held belief that business in
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 era often says that their process
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 new in
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several ways, in their advertisements. There is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion ,I consider it that
sometime
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 positive, and
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 negative develop.   First of all, real development
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on
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 the type of company, which tells us if they are honest or not.
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, the new facility promotes
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, because the
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 people
know
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 about
company
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, even
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 is not true.
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 famous people who just want money in general, they don’t care about the value of products. But you should
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 trust them or listen to them,because they don't care if the products are good or not. Another point to consider, new businesses on the second
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to
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advertising, which
they
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make
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 them
know
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among
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 people, but, in the best, there were no ads, they just
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a posters
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posters
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 in
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, and not everyone saw it, it
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 it, no day is it easy if you want to be successful business.
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, they're
businessman
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a businessman
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 called Ahmed,
he
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 starts his job in November,
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, he publish posts
in
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 social media.
Although
, about man, he
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 been one of the most influential in his business. I will give you small advice. You should try population again and again to be
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 person. In conclusion, dissipate having different
view
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, I strongly believe that, the advertisement benefits us, and encourages the community to know what we can do, but not always.
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  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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