Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter: • suggest how you could help her in her home • say why you would like to do this work • explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Brrette, Kindly, regarding your advertisement, I am writing

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letter to you. Since you are not an Iranian person,

and

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apply

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many people in our

neighborhood

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could not understand or speak English fluently. So I can help you in your house

held in

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some activities that I am able to do

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as cooking and cleaning.

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, I can cook your lunch and bake a cake if you wish because I am keen

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cooking and it is interesting for me to show you Iranian food through helping.

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, I can clean your living room and change the decoration, which is easy for me, since I am studying home

designing

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and

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summer I have

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apply

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plenty of free time to practice on my latest course in

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work.

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, it would pleasure for me to

aim

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hire

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a foreign lady who

need

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help. As you have not mentioned which hours in a day would be needed for you, please inform me about it because I

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an English course and need to be informed about it. My class is every odd day from 9 a.m. to 10:30 a.m. In the end, if you are interested, and want me to do

you

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house work

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housework

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please

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this

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email and send your mobile number to keep in touch. Best Regards, Yasaman Moghadam

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

227 words

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Domestic chores
Culinary skills
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