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Ordinary people try to copy famous personalities by seeing them on TV or reading about them in the newspapers.Why do they do this?Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people?

In today's sophisticated world, it is very obvious for a person to imitate other famous personalities in order to look good and classy in front of others. Majority of the
people
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 know about that personality
while
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 watching
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 or reading them in one of an article. As far as I am concerned, I strongly oppose the idea of copying famous
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. The majority of the
people
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 who love to watch television and read newspapers often come to know about many personalities around the world. To elaborate, nowadays
people
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 feel very attached to the
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 actors who portray the role in the serial.
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, they know they are portraying their character, numerous humans tend to follow these roles.
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, a survey
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 the Times of India says that I want 50% of teenagers follow their role
model
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 because of the good lifestyle shown in the
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 series.
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, many youngsters who read newspapers often come in contact with these famous
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.
People
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 should have their own characteristics and personality when meeting a new person. To clarify, a
man
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 should not follow a movie star and lose all the credits and
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 that
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 poses.
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 to
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, a
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 can follow their idol at a certain stage
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 ,he or she cannot make a career out of it.
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, in India, there are a lot of
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 who love Shahrukh Khan to watch
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printed work or
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set
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 but they are not blindly following him.
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, every youngster should take some tips and get motivated
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 their idol but not copy them as it can have an adverse effect on
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 career in
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later
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 half of their life.
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, I strongly believe that following
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 at a certain limit is still fine,
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 following the
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 completely.
People
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 will come together and solve
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 issue so that the young generation may not fall for
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.

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