The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The diagram illustrates the data for 5 to 14-year-olds in Australia who took part in their leisure pursuits.
Overall
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,
boys
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are more active in these hobbies than
girls
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. It is immediately clear from the chart that watching TV or videos is the most popular activity every one involved in their spare time.
However
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, in three in four of these
pastimes
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the
boys
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enjoyed much more than
girls
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. The next most popular hobby after spending time on TV is computer games. Almost 80 per cent of
boys
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in Australia played electronic games
while
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around 60 per cent of
girls
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did. It is similar different in riding bikes for
boys
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and
girls
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. There are 7 in 10
boys
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participated in bike riding compared with 6 in 10
girls
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. The only activity
girls
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enjoyed more than
boys
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was arts and crafts. Just over half of the
girls
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made things skillfully and beautifully and a bit higher a third
boys
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did. The chart seems to demonstrate that lads take part in outdoor activities more than
schoolgirl
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schoolgirls
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in Australian society.
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