The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The diagram illustrates the data for 5 to 14-year-olds in Australia who took part in their leisure pursuits.

Overall

boys

are more active in these hobbies than

girls

. It is immediately clear from the chart that watching TV or videos is the most popular activity every one involved in their spare time.

However

, in three in four of these

pastimes

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,pastimes

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the

boys

enjoyed much more than

girls

. The next most popular hobby after spending time on TV is computer games. Almost 80 per cent of

boys

in Australia played electronic games

while

around 60 per cent of

girls

did. It is similar different in riding bikes for

boys

and

girls

. There are 7 in 10

boys

participated in bike riding compared with 6 in 10

girls

. The only activity

girls

enjoyed more than

boys

was arts and crafts. Just over half of the

girls

made things skillfully and beautifully and a bit higher a third

boys

did. The chart seems to demonstrate that lads take part in outdoor activities more than

schoolgirl

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schoolgirls

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in Australian society.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
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2Grammar mistakes
 

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