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The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The spreadsheets illustrate why
individuals
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 get rid of smoking habits and when they decide to do that.
Overall
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,
obviously
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 the majority of people stop consuming tobacco products in order to enhance their health,
whereas
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 only a tiny percent of
individuals
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 give up smoking because of family pressure.
In addition
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, a vast
number
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 of questionnaires want to stop the consumption of
cigarettes
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 within the next 6 months. There is an overwhelming
number
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 of
individuals
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 who smoke from 10 to 19
cigarettes
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 per day and want to cease smoking because they are willing to have better health conditions, which accounts for 73%, which is almost 5 times as many as the
number
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 of people who consume the same amount of tobacco products per day but are giving up smoking
due to
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 the pressure from family. The least common reasons to stop the consumption of
cigarettes
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 were present health issues and family pressure and there were identical patterns concerning the
number
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 of
individuals
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 who
smoke
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 10 to 19
cigarettes
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 and fewer than 10, which constituted 10%. Regarding the time when people want to give up
this
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 pernicious habit, in total the
number
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 of those who want to do that within the next months makes up 12%, which is almost one-half of the
number
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 of cigarette smokers who will stop smoking within the next year. In total,the
number
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 of those who intend to give up and smoke 10 to 19
cigarettes
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 per day accounts for 73
percent
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per cent
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, which is approximately one-third of the
number
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 of those who do not want to stop consuming cigarette products at all.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words individuals, number, cigarettes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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