Recently there has been an increase in the number of families where both the husband and wife work. However, women should work less than men in order to take care of their children and do housework. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, a gradual rise can be witnessed in the count of families where both of the couples are working,
whereas
some individuals believe
women
have to
work
for less
amount
of
time
,
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so that they can get additional
time
to look after
children
and house chores. I partially agree that
women
need to
work
for decent hours so that they can prioritise themselves their offspring and household
work
.
Firstly
, As a mother, the primary duty is to take care of their offspring and household
work
. If
women
work
more than enough
amount
of
time
, it could affect the efficiency of raising
children
.
Furthermore
,
children
at smaller ages would need an adequate
amount
of love and caring in order to build a stronger mother-child bond which would be by spending a considerable
amount
of
time
with
children
and not at
work
.
For example
, statistically,
women
who
work
hourly long displayed low strength in forming connections with their families
due to
stress and poor
work
-life balance.
This
is the reason priority towards family important than
work
for
women
it would be so helpful.
On the other hand
, Both of the couples who
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to
work
are surging day by day
due to
generational changes. Most people
earns
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on a daily basis
hence
they are left with no option but to make
women
work
for long hours so that they can help their family financially.
In contrast
, in order to make herself financially independent she works by choice deliberately by deprioritizing other things so she could leverage to expedite in achieving their dreams.
For instance
,
women
who
work
for a longer day
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can make better progress at
work
.
To conclude
,
Although
there is a steep soar of count in families where husband and wife will
work
, to improve
bond
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of the co-ordination and caring between the members
women
need to
work
a shorter
amount
of
time
at
work
and spend most of the part with
family
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