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The government should not waste money on arts as the same money would be better spent on p projects like sanitation or infrastructure. Do you agree to this statement

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There is a general discussion regarding the architectural developments done by the government. The majority of the
people
 say that
this
 is a complete waste of money, I differ from
this
 statement as these changes are vital for a
country
 to grow.
According to
 recent research, every developing and third-world
country
 allocates a specific budget for construction. One of the major reasons is that it attracts tourism, leading to a surge in government reserves. Increased tourism not only brings
people
 to the
country
 but
also
 the foreign currency with them.
People
 coming to the homeland with recover the cost of the construction in a couple of months.
Secondly
, sanitation will promote the
country
 on an international level.
People
 will post different videos on social media platforms, enabling millions of
people
 to watch the inner beauty of the
country
. Investors will be attracted, in order to generate more revenue.
This
 is the best way to recover the cost in a short span of time and generate profits. More hotels will be constructed, giving the foreigners an opportunity to feel relaxed and investors to earn ample money. In conclusion, it is just a perception that projects like sanitation or infrastructure do not benefit anyone.
This
 brings an increase in foreign remittance through investments and publicity,
therefore
, a boost in government foreign reserves.
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