Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to a workplace every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages?

There are people who believe that doing their job at their own place
it
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would be way better than driving to
office
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every
time
. In my point of view, the
drawback
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drawbacks
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of working from
home
are more than the benefits. Some say the benefit of working from
house saves
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home is saving
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times
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time
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and
improve
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improving
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work
and
life
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work-life
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balance.
For instance
, my sister
suffer
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from morning traffic on her way to
work
,
everyday
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she
spend
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more than one hour
to arrive
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on
time
.
Furthermore
, My sister not having much
time
to spend with her children because of the long working hours. She
believe
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that working from
home
will
saves
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save
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her valuable
time
and will improve her life balance.
On the other hand
, there
are
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a lot of
drawback
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drawbacks
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and negativity in working from
home
, Like Distractions and
bad
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a bad
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enviroment
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environment
, Frequent breaks and less productivity.
For instance
,
in
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the COVID-19 pandemic there are a lot of companies lost their profits,
due to
the
employee less
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employees
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productivity.
In addition
,
work
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working
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from
home
with family, kids and pets
are
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is
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very distracting.
For example
, I had an important online meeting in my room and my nephew was screaming
at
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the
backgroung
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background
and my cat
jump
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on the computer which was really
distructive
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destructive
distracting
and annoying.
Moreover
, I couldn’t manage my
work
time
because of the freedom of
time
managmenet
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management
which
make
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made
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me
taking
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a lot of breaks chatting with family and playing with the kids. To summarise, I believe that the disadvantages of working
home
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at home
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outweight
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outweigh
the advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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