Some people believe that parents should limit their children hours of watching tv and playing computer games, but encourage to read books. Do you agree or disagree

Reading books now has a declining trend
while
there are sharp increase among
children
playing computer
games
or watching TV. Several
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might be that reading a
book
would require
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and
slower
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a slower
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time
to get the
reward
(
such
as
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conflict resolution or getting the answer that
book
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the book
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has offered),
on the other
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such
computer
games
offer
fastest
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reward
through solving serial
mini-task
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mini-tasks
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troughout
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throughout
the game. As a
gen-Z
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, I still agree with
previous
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generation that
children
should read more
book
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books
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,
while
also
concentiously
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conscientiously
contentiously
limit
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their screen
time
. Here is some point of view I had regarding
this
topic. Reading a
book
is good, I strongly agree. Why? because it added more knowledge to the reader, more understanding to
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surrounding
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, and
give
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the reader more perspective about life.
Book
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itself could
be differentiate
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into two
category
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categories
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,
such
as
Fictions
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fiction
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and Non-fiction books. To put it simply,
fictions
are often not a real
event
, it could be
a fables
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a fable
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or a story about a person/
event
that
are
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never happened or could be based on some
event
but not entirely the same.
Fictions
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, in my
opinion
,
incite
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incites
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people
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imagination,
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and give
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give
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the readers perspective about the character that
being
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is being
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narrated.
Fictions
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give
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gives
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the readers
a
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room to imagine a special
event
that happened in the
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world and take lessons in the story. On
other
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the other
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hand,
non-
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non-fiction
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fictions
are
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is
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a
book
that
based
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strictly on a real
event
or that has references to
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real research that has been done by scientists.
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fictions
gives
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the reader
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reader
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readers
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a
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new knowledge about
the
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current affairs or updates in sciences world. These two
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types
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of
book
chategory
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categories
offered
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children
to
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broaden their knowledge,
while
also
cultivate
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their empathy, emotion, and imagination as a human.
This
is why in my
opinion
why
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children
needs
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reading.
On the other hand
, having some
fun-
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time
one or two hours a week
such
playing
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as playing
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a computer game should not
be deem
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be deemed
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as wasting
time
. As a human, we need to relax and refresh our
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from work or school. So, It is okay to allocate
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hours a week to
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playing
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a video
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video games
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games
or watching
a
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apply
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TV.
Parent
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Parents
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should be wise to give
children
their "fun"
time
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a few
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hours a week.
Parent
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could design
this
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fun time
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time
as a
reward
that only could
be unlock
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when the
children
has been
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have
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finished their
responsibility
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responsibilities
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as
a
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a child
children
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children
. Limiting
this
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these
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"
fun-times
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fun times
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" in my
opinion
is unwise. Strict parents would only create
a good manipulators
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good manipulators
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. Because
its
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it is
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part of
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a humane
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humane
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trait to seek something fun, so strictly prohibited it would be unwise in my
opinion
. In conclusion, reading a
book
is good for
children
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growth and cultivating their human aspect before
join
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joining
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the community.
While
reading a
book
and limiting playing
games
should
be encourage
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be encouraged
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, being very strict
on
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with
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children
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children's
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fun-times
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fun times
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is unwise because it is part of their development.
Parent
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Parents
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should be wise to use the
fun-times
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fun times
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as
reward
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rewards
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to
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children
and not strictly
prohibited
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them.
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