Some people believe that parents should limit their children hours of watching tv and playing computer games, but encourage to read books. Do you agree or disagree
Reading books now has a declining trend
while
there are sharp increase among children
playing computer games
or watching TV. Several reason
might be that reading a Change to a plural noun
reasons
book
would require patient
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patience
slower
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a slower
time
to get the reward
(such
as the
conflict resolution or getting the answer that Correct article usage
apply
book
has offered), Correct article usage
the book
on the other
hand
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such
computer games
offer fastest
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the fastest
reward
through solving serial mini-task
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mini-tasks
troughout
the game. As a Correct your spelling
throughout
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, I still agree with Change the capitalization
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previous
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children
should read more book
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books
while
also
concentiously
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conscientiously
contentiously
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limiting
time
. Here is some point of view I had regarding this
topic.
Reading a book
is good, I strongly agree. Why? because it added more knowledge to the reader, more understanding to it
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its
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give
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itself could Add an article
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be differentiate
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be differentiated
category
, Change to a plural noun
categories
such
as Fictions
and Non-fiction books. To put it simply, Fix the agreement mistake
fiction
fictions
are often not a real event
, it could be a fables
or a story about a person/Correct the article-noun agreement
a fable
fables
event
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never happened or could be based on some Unnecessary verb
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event
but not entirely the same. Fictions
, in my Fix the agreement mistake
Fiction
opinion
, incite
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incites
people
imagination, Change noun form
people's
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and give
give
the readers perspective about the character that Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
being
narrated. Add a missing verb
is being
Fictions
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Fiction
give
the readers Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
a
room to imagine a special Correct article usage
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event
that happened in the character
world and take lessons in the story. On Change noun form
character's
other
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the other
non-
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non-fiction
fictions
are
a Correct subject-verb agreement
is
book
that based
strictly on a real Add a missing verb
is based
event
or that has references to a
real research that has been done by scientists. Remove the article
apply
Non-
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Non-fiction
fictions
gives Add an article
the reader
reader
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readers
a
new knowledge about Correct article usage
apply
the
current affairs or updates in sciences world. These two Correct article usage
apply
type
of Change to a plural noun
types
book
chategory
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categories
offered
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offer
children
to
broaden their knowledge, Correct article usage
the to
while
also
cultivate
their empathy, emotion, and imagination as a human. Change the form of the verb
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is why in my opinion
why
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children
needs
reading.
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need
On the other hand
, having some fun-
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fun time
time
one or two hours a week such
playing
a computer game should not Change preposition
as playing
be deem
as wasting Change the verb form
be deemed
time
. As a human, we need to relax and refresh our head
from work or school. So, It is okay to allocate Fix the agreement mistake
heads
few
hours a week to Correct article usage
a few
play
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playing
a video
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video games
a video game
games
or watching a
TV. Correct article usage
apply
Parent
should be wise to give Fix the agreement mistake
Parents
children
their "fun" time
few
hours a week. Correct article usage
a few
Parent
could design Fix the agreement mistake
Parents
this
fun-
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fun time
time
as a reward
that only could be unlock
when the Change the verb form
be unlocked
children
has been
finished their Wrong verb form
have
responsibility
as Fix the agreement mistake
responsibilities
a
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a child
children
children
. Limiting this
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these
fun-times
" in my Correct your spelling
fun times
opinion
is unwise. Strict parents would only create a good manipulators
. Because Correct the article-noun agreement
good manipulators
a good manipulator
its
part of Correct your spelling
it is
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a humane
humane
trait to seek something fun, so strictly prohibited it would be unwise in my Correct article usage
a humane
opinion
.
In conclusion, reading a book
is good for children
growth and cultivating their human aspect before Change noun form
children's
join
the community. Change the verb form
joining
While
reading a book
and limiting playing games
should be encourage
, being very strict Change the verb form
be encouraged
on
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with
children
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children's
fun-times
is unwise because it is part of their development. Correct your spelling
fun times
Parent
should be wise to use the Fix the agreement mistake
Parents
fun-times
as Correct your spelling
fun times
reward
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rewards
to
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for
children
and not strictly prohibited
them.Wrong verb form
prohibit
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