Some people believe that parents should limit their children hours of watching tv and playing computer games, but encourage to read books. Do you agree or disagree

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Reading books now has a declining trend

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there are sharp increase among

children

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playing computer

games

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or watching TV. Several

reason

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might be that reading a

book

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would require

patient

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and

slower

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a slower

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time

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to get the

reward

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conflict resolution or getting the answer that

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book

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has offered),

on the other

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hand

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such

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offer

fastest

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reward

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through solving serial

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troughout

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throughout

the game. As a

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, I still agree with

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generation that

children

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should read more

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book

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while

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also

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concentiously

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conscientiously

contentiously

limit

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their screen

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. Here is some point of view I had regarding

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topic. Reading a

book

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is good, I strongly agree. Why? because it added more knowledge to the reader, more understanding to

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surrounding

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, and

give

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the reader more perspective about life.

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Book

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itself could

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into two

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for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

494 words

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Some people believe that parents should limit their children hours of watching tv and playing computer games, but encourage to read books. Do you agree or disagree

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries is a positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

University students often focus on one subject. However, some people think that universities should encourage students to learn a range of other subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Write a letter to a city planning manager about demolition of a historical building in your area and say – Explain why it shouldn’t be demolished. – Suggest a future use for this building. – Recommend a way to raise money for repairs.