Nowadays, a lot of people change the way of smoking: from conventional cigarettes to electronic ones. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of this statement.

Smoking is injurious to health
therefore
, in any
form
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it is not beneficial for health
as well as
for
environment
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the environment
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. These days, people are changing their way of consumption of
this
. They are adopting electronic
cigarettes
instead
of conventional
one
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ones
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.
This
eassay
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essay
going to discuss
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the prons
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prons
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pros
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and cons in
following
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the following
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paragraphs.
To begin
with, conventional
cigarettes
are made of paper and its
dricetly
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directly
harm to your body.
Inaddition
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, it is going to have
direct
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a direct
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detrimental
affect
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effect
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on
person's
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a person's
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organ
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for instance
, thirty
percentes
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per cent
of
population
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the population
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are additicted to
smoke
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smoking
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and have cancer like disease .
Moreover
, the mode of consuming it can be different
however
, it is going to produce some sort of
advers
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adverse
effect
in
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on
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individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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body
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bodies
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who
litterely
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literally
taste it.
In contrast
, electronic
cigarettes
are
more safe
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safer
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whilst
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than
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conventional
one
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ones
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.
Its
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dose
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does
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not produce any kind of fumes
and
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or
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harmful substances which affect the people who consume it .
Moreover
, it's safe for non -
smoker
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smokers
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for
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to
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some
extend
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because it is not going to harm directly to anybody
such
as, there are many
incidence
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incidents
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where people
did
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do
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not smoke ,
than
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then
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also
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they are in danger because of
cigarettes
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cigarette
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smoke.
To conclude
, there are many
drawback
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drawbacks
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of smoking, in any condition it's not advisable
thus
, whether it is conventional or electronic
cigarettes
it has
plethora
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a plethora
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affect
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of affect
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in
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on
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the individuals
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individuals
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individual
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body.
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