A local council is planning to redevelop its existing civic centre. The diagrams below show the propes changes to the civic centre. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

A local council is planning to redevelop its existing civic centre. The diagrams below show the propes changes to the civic centre. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The display diagram shows a local
council
is planning to redevelop its existing civic
centre
as well as
the
propes
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proposed
changes to the civic
centre
. The civic
centre
will be planned to change. There are two maps: one is the existing and the other is the plan for
new
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the new
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. In old, in A Avenue is in
concert
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the concert
a concert
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hall
,
near by
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nearby
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concert
hall
there is two car
park
.
In
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On
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the left side of
council
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the council
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office
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,office
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there is
exhibition
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an exhibition
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hall
and
in
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on
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right
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the right
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side there is
library
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the library
a library
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. between
car
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the car
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park
and
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the library
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library
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,library
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there is
small
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a small
the small
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shopping
center
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centre
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. In
plans
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the plans
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for
new
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the new
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, there is
theatre
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a theatre
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and
council
office in C street,
open
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an open
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park
and
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an undergroud
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undergroud
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underground
car
park
is there between
council
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the council
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office and
exhibition
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the exhibition
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hall
. The shopping
centre
is as it is. The change
are
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is
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made in
open
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an open
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park
and
undergroud
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underground
park
.
To conclude
, the above data describes the existing and new
plan
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plans
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words council, centre, hall, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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