Some people think watching TV and films makes children more creative. Others think that it can actually lower their creativity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is thought that watching
TV
and
films
makes
children
more creative. Some people argue that it can actually lower their creativity. In my point of view, I partly agree with
this
phenomenon. On the one hand, watching
movies
always
stimulate
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kids
' brains,
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the pressure and
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their
right
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brain.
Firstly
, their brains can
be functioned
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when
children
watch
movies
such
as science fiction
films
and cartoons. Watching these kinds of
films
not only makes
children
feel curious but
also
improves their imagination. From that point,
kids
are more ingenious so that their grades at school
more
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likely to
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better.
Secondly
, stress relief is another benefit of watching
movies
. Some
films
may provide them with positive emotions when
children
have to suffer from physical and mental fatigue.
Last
but not least,
children
are more likely to use their right brain to develop their abilities
such
as creative
skills
, art and music
skills
when they approach some useful
movies
.
For example
, SABC is a
TV
program that teaches
kids
how to make crafts. Many learn craft-making as early as pre-school and sell some of their products in the streets of Cape Town with the assistance of their parents.
On the other hand
,
TV
over-usage
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in
children
results in asthenopia which is an eye disease.
Moreover
, the more
time
youngster
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spend
on
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watching
TV
the less
time
they spend
on
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reading books or
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.
Furthermore
,
kids
should not keep an eye on television too much if they do not want to decline their abilities
such
as critical thinking and reasoning
skills
.
In addition
, playing games or watching
movies
will limit their imagination and creativity because they would like to spend
time
using smart devices rather than going outside to find out relive
skills
.
For instance
,
according to
doctor Jenny Radesky, overuse of smart devices will influence
kids
' kinesthetic abilities, mathematical
skills
and scientific
skills
. In conclusion, watching
TV
is
an
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ideal for
kids
to take a rest but do not abuse it because smart devices not only affect their brains but
also
influence their communication ability. Parents should limit their
time
and let
kids
see helpful
movies
to boost their left-brained and right-brained.
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