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The table given illustrates the percentage of schoolchildren attending four groups of secondary schools from 2000 – 2009.

The table given illustrates the percentage of schoolchildren attending four groups of secondary schools from 2000 – 2009.
The given table depicts the proportion of schoolchildren who took part in four types of secondary
schools
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 between 2000 and 2009.
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, the popularity of all kinds of
schools
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 decreased with the passage of time, except Community
schools
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. The
number
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 of
students
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 who participated in the Voluntary-controlled
schools
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 was the most in 2000 and 2005. What stands out among the proportion of
students
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 in the table is the significant shrinkage in the
number
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 of
students
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 who went to voluntary-controlled
schools
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. It is noticeable that approximately 32
percent
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per cent
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 had fallen over the period shown. Look at the table in more detail, in the year 2000, the negligible
number
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 of
students
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 who went to the community class was 12%. In the following years, the
number
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 of attendees of community classes increased about 45% in just 9 years.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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