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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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Changes of people who went for international travel in 1990,1995,200,and 2005, are represented by the table below.
Overall
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,it is quite obvious that the total
number
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 of people internationally
traveling
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travelling
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increases
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 over the years in the shown regions. 2005 had the highest total
number
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 of travels in the majority of the regions mentioned. Europe managed to
had
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 the highest
number
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 of 400.2
million
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 in 2005.
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 the Middle East had the lowest
number
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 of 9.8
million
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 in 1990. Yet, Asia
and
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apply
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the
pacific
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Pacific
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, and Africa increased gradually
overtime
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over time
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. Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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 started with 60.2
million
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 in 1990 and ended up with 135.8
million
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 in 2005.
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, Africa began with 18.2
million
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 and was done with 28.7
million
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 in 2005.
On the other hand
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, America unlike the rest of the areas had fluctuations over the years. It started with 80.5
million
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 in 2005 and steeply increased till it reached 118.2
million
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 in 2000.
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 decreased dramatically to reach 113.2
million
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 international
travels
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travellers
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 in 2005.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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