In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way.

In
this
contemporary world, businesses tend advanced
advertisements
to grow rather than others
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they have advantages
as well as
disadvantages
also
. I think negative developments outweigh positive developments.
To begin
with, business competition can be affected
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Improvements because they do more innovations to produce new and high-quality products
as well as
they persuade
advertisements
to deliver and grasp new
customers
' minds to make more profits.
Consequently
, the community is more prone to purchase companies' products as they wish, so one type of advertisement catches society's awareness easily.
For instance
, one dairy company delivered a developed advert to show they used only fresh milk and it was handed over to regular
customers
without adding chemicals.
Finally
, they experienced the largest profit in other years.
Furthermore
, making
advertisements
leads the marketing effectively.
On the other hand
, there are lots of disadvantages that can be seen with marketing
advertisements
. When it plays more and more frequently, people are going to become tired and they hesitate to buy products.
Moreover
, their attention will be lost and the company may not achieve their expectation.
Besides
,
customers
wish to buy alternatives from another company.
Furthermore
, businesses plummeted amount of
customers
and their annual profit
also
.
For example
, in the
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year period, one cake maker delivered an advertisement more than 10 times in an hour,
therefore
that product was not bought by people who had used it
last
 year. 
Hence
, the advertisement has more risk. Whenever they deliver
advertisements
, Should have to give first priority to content and quality. In conclusion,
advertisements
have a good and bad effect on society
as well as
their makers,
however
producing
advertisements
with new technology will have more negative effects because their reality does not match with the advert.
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