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The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of males and females engaged in
further
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 education in Britain. It shows whether they were studying full-time or part-time and is divided into three periods.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of men and women studying part-time outnumbered those studying full-time by a significant margin.
While
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 both modes were relatively similar between the sexes, there was some variance, especially in the 1990s when the
number
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 of women studying part-time increased substantially. With regards to full-time education, male students approximately doubled from around 100.000 in 1970 to well over 200.000 by the end of 1991. For women, the trajectory was less consistent rising sharply in the first decade and
then
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 tapering off to an almost identical level to that of men in the 1990s. The
number
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 of
male
Change to a plural noun
males

The singular countable noun male follows the quantifier number, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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 engaged in part-time study over the three periods fluctuated, dropping from approximately 1 million to 900.000 over the three periods; meanwhile, the females studying part-time steadily increased from nearly 800.000 in 1970-71 to well above million in 1990-91.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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