Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices would help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
Currently
people Add a comma
,Currently
use
Use synonyms
the
private and public Correct article usage
apply
transport
to their Use synonyms
transport
requirements.
People choose to Use synonyms
use
Use synonyms
the
private Correct article usage
apply
vehicles
Use synonyms
to
their Change preposition
for
transport
needs Use synonyms
Linking Words
due to
Change preposition
for
few
reasons.
Correct article usage
a few
Firstly
, they like to have Linking Words
comfortable
journey and they can complete their journey within Add an article
a comfortable
short
period by using a private vehicle. Because in the public Add an article
a short
transports
we can witness huge delays Add a comma
,transports
due to
various reasons. Not only that, there is no big difference in cost between the public and private Linking Words
transports
. Fix the agreement mistake
transport
Due to
Linking Words
above
Correct article usage
the above
reasons
citizens try to Add a comma
,reasons
use
private Use synonyms
vehicles
Use synonyms
than
Rephrase
rather than
the
buses and trains. Correct article usage
apply
This
increase Linking Words
of
Change preposition
in
vehicles
caused to pollution of Use synonyms
air
.
If Correct article usage
the air
government
can improve the transportation system to a good standard, citizens will tend to Add an article
the government
use
public transportation Use synonyms
method
Fix the agreement mistake
methods
than
Rephrase
rather than
their
private ones.
To maintain Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
good Correct article usage
apply
standard
Fix the agreement mistake
standards
in
bus lines and train lines, Change preposition
of
firstly
government Linking Words
need
Wrong verb form
needs
replace
old Fix the infinitive
to replace
vehicles
with new ones. After they need to ensure the maintenance of these Use synonyms
vehicles
Use synonyms
done
on time. Add a missing verb
is done
Linking Words
Also
they can improve the roads and railway Add a comma
,Also
line
to a good standard. Fix the agreement mistake
lines
These thing
will help to maintain Change the determiner
This thing
These things
smooth
public transportation system.
At the same time government need to reduce Correct article usage
a smooth
the
ticket prices to a certain level as citizen can see the cost Correct article usage
apply
different
between Replace the word
difference
two
method of systems.
Correct article usage
the two
Then
people will try to Linking Words
use
public Use synonyms
transport
Use synonyms
than
Rephrase
rather than
the
private Correct article usage
apply
vehicles
. Use synonyms
This
will help to reduce the Linking Words
Use synonyms
vehicles
on Correct quantifier usage
number of vehicles
road
. Correct article usage
the road
Due to
Linking Words
this
traffic jams Linking Words
on
busy areas will Change preposition
in
reduce
. Wrong verb form
be reduced
This
will again help to smooth Linking Words
floor
of Correct article usage
the floor
vehicles
. So air pollution will decrease Use synonyms
due to
Linking Words
decrease
Correct article usage
a decrease
of
vehicle moments. Change preposition
in
Linking Words
Also
fuel efficiency of Add a comma
,Also
vehicles
will increase Use synonyms
due to
lack of traffic jams.Linking Words
Submitted by skdikshan on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
content
You need to ensure that your essay adequately answers the question. The task asked for your opinion, and while you discuss pros and cons of public and private transport, your personal stance is not clear.
structure
Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Always introduce your topic and opinion in the first paragraph and summarize your argument in the last paragraph.
grammar
Improve your language accuracy with prepositions. For example, 'use private vehicles for their transport needs' instead of 'use private vehicles to their transport needs'
Fully explain your ideas
To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.