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You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems.

#job #week
I hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits.I am writing
this
 letter with the crucial purpose of asking about I start a new job next week, to be ,honest I So I to start work in 2 weeks.have some health problems. On the one hand first and important thing is my left leg is broken.
Therefore
, I should not get out of bed.I should bed for 2 weeks.
That is
 why I am going to work next 2 weeks. On the other side of the coin, I wanted to tell you. I hope you won't hire another worker to replace me
Finally
 , having given the previous facts. I hope you will take immediate action I forward to hearing from you in the near future.
Thus
 do not hesitate to contact me.
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