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Sugary drinks should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree.

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Carbonated
drinks
 have become extremely popular these days, which leads to detrimental impacts on people's health and well-being.
Hence
, there is an opinion that imposing higher
prices
 on sugar beverages will deter consumers from purchasing them. I agree with
this
 statement, as I think that if these
drinks
 are expensive, individuals will focus more on other expenses and healthy alternatives.
To begin
 with, increasing
prices
 on carbonated beverages will lead to saving money for crucial expenses,
such
 as school fees, electricity bills, food and entertainment.
Moreover
, in many countries, paying off the bills is getting more challenging
due to
 inflation, especially for young families.
This
 means that
while
 having a range of belongings to pay for individuals simply will not be able to afford sugary products because of their high cost.
For example
, in 2023, in Russia, the rent
prices
 increased by 6%, which made it almost impossible to purchase extra food and drink treats, as householders have to pay their bills.
Additionally
, if
prices
 for carbonated beverages are increased, manufacturers will have to find alternatives to these
drinks
, so they will keep being popular among customers and eventually avoid bankruptcy.
This
 will motivate companies to produce healthier
drinks
 with less sugar and promote them.
Accordingly
, no sugary
drinks
 intake leads to better health conditions and mitigates the issue of obesity.
For instance
, in the UK, the levy of a tax on
drinks
,
such
 as Coca-Cola and 7up, has already been imposed to tackle the problem of obesity and blood pressure. In conclusion, there is no doubt that imposing higher
prices
 on carbonated drink products prevents individuals from buying them. Higher
prices
 on these
drinks
 will encourage companies to find healthier drink alternatives which will mitigate the problems of serious diseases improving people's health and lifestyles.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sugary drinks, sugar-sweetened beverages, soft drinks
  • Health consequences, obesity, diabetes, dental health
  • Government intervention, public health, deterrent
  • Sin taxes, levies, fiscal policies
  • Equity, accessibility, low-income communities
  • Consumer behavior, dietary habits
  • Education campaigns, public awareness
  • Beverage industry, economic impact
  • Paternalism, autonomy, personal choice
  • Global trends, international policies
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