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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of several
path
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paths
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 of how Canadian and Australian people
accessing
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access
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 the
news
.
Overall
, the percentages of not specified media, radio, and print respectively were the lowest accessing media in both countries,
while
 Online and TV are most favourite accessing media.
To begin
 with, accessing the
news
 on TV was the most popular one in
Canada
 at 40%. Meanwhile, the other paths that were not specified just had 3
percent
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per cent
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 of all accessing ways. Which is followed by online
access
 had 36%. The same thing happened in
Australia
 where the lowest path of accessing the
news
 is not specified, which was 2%, 1
percent
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per cent
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 lower than in
Canada
.
On the other hand
,
access
 to the
news
 on TV in
Australia
 was lower by 3% than in
Canada
 which had 37%.
In addition
, the percentage of Online
access
 in
Australia
 was more dominant than the other aspects, including
Canada
. It had 52% of accessing
news
 that had half of the data in
Australia
, and 16% higher than online
access
 in
Canada
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, canada, access, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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