People are encouraged to get rid of things in order to get newest fashion and the latest Technology.Do the disadvantage of this trend outweigh its advantage.

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Individuals
these
day
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are running after new
tech
-gadgets and trendy
fashion
. in order to
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emulate
evaluate
their peer they throw away old clothes and gadgets .
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is
an
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disturbibg
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disturbing
trend
. as
following
this
trends
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results in
credit
card
debt and low
self esttem
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self-esteem
.
whereas
clothes and
tech
gadegts
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gadgets
are still
usabale
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usable
find no takers . First and foremost,blindly following
latest
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the latest
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trend
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trends
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in
fashion
and
tech
gadegets
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gadgets
is an expensive habit.
adolscent
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adolescent
adolescents
are buying
latest
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the latest
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fashion
and
tech
gadgets on
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card
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.
Moreover
, they
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always
end up in debt.
Furthermore
,
this
habit promotes
consumersim
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consumerism
in society which is
also
not a good sign.
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US
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, kids
are always want
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new clothes and
latest
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the latest
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i-phones
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iPhones
.
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promotes consumerism and
credit
card
spending .
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beleive
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believe
this
trend
has more
drawback
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drawbacks
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then
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than
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prerogtives
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prerogatives
.
However
, following
latest
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the latest
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trends
in
fashion
and
tech
gadets
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gadgets
promotes innovation in
technology
. It
support
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fashion
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the fashion
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and
technology
industry and
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them to launch new products every quarter. citizens who follow
this
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trends
are responsible for
increase
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the increase
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in demand
of
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these products ,
also
it
boost
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economy
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the economy
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too.
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in , uk people are always concerned about adopting
to
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new
technology
.Still
i
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think
this
trend
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has
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more disadvantages than
adavantges
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advantages
.
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,
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following
latest
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trend
is
good
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a good
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sign , it has
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effect on individuals .most of
the
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people have low
self esteem
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self-esteem
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and
its
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promotes
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nature among humans. living in
credit
card
debt can
be
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detrimental
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a detrimental
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effect on personal finance. I
beleif
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believe
belief
that following
trends
in
fashion
and
technology
has more impediments than benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumerism
  • Disposability
  • Sustainable fashion
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental degradation
  • Economic implications
  • Cultural shift
  • Innovative solutions
  • Planned obsolescence
  • Financial burden
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