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some people think that schools should focus on academic subjects like algebra, history, and physics, but others think that schools should spent time focusing on practical skills like time management and banking. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #schools #focus #subjects #algebra #history #physics #time #skills #management
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 education system
include
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 several various fields that allow
students
 to move forward in their adult life depending on their interests.
Nevertheless
, there are different opinions about the application of
the
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education,
consist
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 of
theorotical
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theoretical
 and practical
educations
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education
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. In
this
 essay, I will argue both thoughts and I will outline why spending
time
 on academic subjects
are
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 moderately more important for
students
. In schools,
students
 more often than not focus on courses that include
theorotical
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theoretical
 mathematics, physics, biology and history.
Although
 there is a possibility for
students
 to struggle
while
 learning
these
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this
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 technical
informations
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information
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, terminology and utility of science obviously improve their brain development and general knowledge, which is extremely beneficial for their thinking process; able to see from a different perspective and make decisions in their adult life.
On the other hand
,
other
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the other
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 side
suggest
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suggests
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 student should get qualified in terms of practical experiences rather than
theoroticals
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theoretical
. An important point of view is,
even
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that even
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 though most children
are spent
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spend
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time
 on scientific objects, sometimes they struggle to integrate
these
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this
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 learning into their
life
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lives
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.
Therefore
, giving a hand to
students
 in order to practice skills concentrated on finance and
time
 management
are
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 crucial.
For instance
, some schools have selective courses that consist of projects and them to run an imaginary business and
adapting
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 them into banking in terms of revenues, costs and running errands. In conclusion, there are several opinions regards to teaching
students
 relying on
academical
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academic
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 and practical knowledge, who will be the doctors, constructors or maybe
housewifes
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housewives
 of
future
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the future
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.
This
 essay outlined education from different
aspecs
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aspects
 and explained that spending
time
on
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in
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 academia could be more useful because of the alterations and improvements
on
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in
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 their brain
while
 learning science.
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