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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

These days, more and more people are said to have
inclination
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 towards different ways of
treatment
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 rather than visiting a therapist
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 and
follow his
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following
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 prescriptions.
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 essay will argue how different are the conditions regarding
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 issue from both negative and positive
view points
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viewpoints
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. Considering a type of
an
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illness, measures that are taken are varied, and there is no need
of
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 a specialist to cure an ill
person
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 with
less
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 serious disease. A
person
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 suffering from a temporary backache, for example, can find his
treatment
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 in medications available,
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 as ointment in drugstores.
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, it creates less crowded clinics and hospitals which are more suitable for more severe illnesses that are in need of urgent services. When a
person
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 who catches
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 consumes herbal tea
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 acquires less physical activity, provides an opportunity for doctors in the clinics or health
centers
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putting
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 their time and energy
to service
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into servicing
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 other important patients.
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, the case is not the same
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 all
occasion
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. The more serious the illness, the more in need of visiting a specialist. Those who have cancer or cardiovascular illnesses should take
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 matter into account, and visit their doctor regularly. Not only does it provide them with a better way of
treatment
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 based on science and technology,
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 as specific facilities and equipment (
radio therapy
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radiotherapy
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 and injection) available only in hospitals, but it can
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 give them a chance
of communicating
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 with those who are in the same situation
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 and gaining experience.
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, it is imperative for some occasions to visit their therapist.
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, with regard to the case of illness, we can decide whether it is a preferable action to visit a doctor or not. To be cured by specific
treatment
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 methods is necessary
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 some serious issues,
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 in other occasions that are not that
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hard, a
person
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 can rely on normal
treatment
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 available everywhere.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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