Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations. Some people say that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
argue that
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causes horrible sound,
air
dirtying and
wasting
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waste
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money
in
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re-building bigger airports. They said that one cause
are
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the
low budget
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flights,
specially
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in vacation period.
Moreover
, some
people
suggest that every country should increase the tax
in
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all flights. In my perspective,
air
traffic
are
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not the main issue and taxing
people
will only be hard
to
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normal
people
and easy
to
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every rich person which is unfair.
Therefore
, I totally disagree. On the one hand, noise and pollution are not mainly
air
traffic
issue
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issues
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. To clarify, vehicle
traffic
effecting
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the
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air
polution
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pollution
and
create
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a
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crazy sounds more than anything in the world.
For instance
, some countries like
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had
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a bad reputation
about
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air
polution
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pollution
.
Furthermore
, It is
crowded
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a crowded
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country with a lot of cars that create unhealthy
air
.
Also
, it increases a lot of
noises
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in town.
In contrast
,
Air
traffic
is very far in the sky and it
dosen’t
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have any impact
in
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the ground.
On the other hand
, increasing
airplane
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traffic
price
are
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not a good solution.
For example
,
people
try their best to save money to travel and explore the world.
In addition
, If the tax were higher there
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would
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be a lot of
depress
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depressed
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people
around the world, which
will
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would
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cause more problems
instead
of solving any issue. In conclusion,
although
taxing
people
for the flight will reduce
air
traffic
,
but
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I totally disagree with
this
concept because it will be unequal to poor
people
.
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