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Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal? 250 words

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Nowadays, human beings
agrued
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 that some countries should invest more money in producing their own products.
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 the other hand, some individuals they
dosen’t
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doesn’t
 believe that
this
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important
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 issue. From my point of view, I totally agree with the fact that every land should have a goal to do their own production for goods
instead
 of taking it from outside because
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 it is the best investment.
To begin
 with,
products
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 production and investment have been important for many years. Some people prefer to get materials and goods from their own country.
Moreover
,
local
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 get a really good reputation around the world.
For example
,
Arab
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Arabs
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 believe that everything made by Gulf
countires
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countries
 would be better than
foregin
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foreign
 countries.
For instance
, supplements, food, clothes and perfume.
On the other hand
, local production
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 many disadvantages.
Firstly
, producing materials and goods can not be done in every country.
For instance
, in
Bahrain
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 we don’t have factories, companies or
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giant
farmes
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farmers
frames
farms
.
Therefore
, even if our land
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 to produce things, they can’t because of the weakness that they have. To summarise, both of the modes of
produce
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producing
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 stuff in the region have their own advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, there should be searching in
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 to find things that they can produce locally because
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its
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 really
effecting
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 our
finanical
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financial
 life.
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