Question: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Question: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph describes how many
minutes
of telephone calls in
UK
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the UK
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, local fixed
line
, national and international-fixed
line
,
mobiles
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and mobiles
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between 1995 and 2002.
It is clear that
the
Local-fixed
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Local
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line
was been talked
the
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about the
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most,and
mobiles
started to become
popularity
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popular
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in 2000.
Intially
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Initially
, in 1995 the British talked
more
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for more
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than 70
billion
minutes
while
national and international fixed
line
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lines
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about
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for about
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37
billon
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billion
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minutes
.At
first,
the amount of community used
mobiles
were
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was
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standed
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stood
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at 3
billion
minutes
.It can be seen that from 1995 to 1999 there was an went up gradually in local fixed
line
reached to 90
billion
minutes
but from that to 2002, the
firgues
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figures
for individuals called local fixed
line
dropped sharply to 72
billion
minutes
. On the one hand , the national and international fixed
line
climbed up in each
years
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year
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and
reach
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reached
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61
billions
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billion
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in 2002
while
began only approximately 38
billion
minutes
.
Additionally
,
the
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apply
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mobiles
attracted the majority and became popular in 2002 since the
mobiles
increased sharply through each year.
However
, in 1995 the number of people called
mobiles
were
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was
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only 3
billion
minutes
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, mobiles, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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