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Question: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Question: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph describes how many
minutes
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 of telephone calls in
UK
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the UK
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, local fixed
line
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, national and international-fixed
line
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,
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mobiles
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and mobiles
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 between 1995 and 2002.
It is clear that
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 the
Local-fixed
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Local
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line
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 was been talked
the
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about the
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 most,and
mobiles
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 started to become
popularity
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popular
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 in 2000.
Intially
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Initially
, in 1995 the British talked
more
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for more
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 than 70
billion
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minutes
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while
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 national and international fixed
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line
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lines
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about
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for about
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 37
billon
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billion
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minutes
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.At
first,
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the amount of community used
mobiles
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were
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was
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standed
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stood
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 at 3
billion
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minutes
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.It can be seen that from 1995 to 1999 there was an went up gradually in local fixed
line
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 reached to 90
billion
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minutes
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 but from that to 2002, the
firgues
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figures
 for individuals called local fixed
line
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 dropped sharply to 72
billion
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minutes
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. On the one hand , the national and international fixed
line
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 climbed up in each
years
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year
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 and
reach
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reached
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 61
billions
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billion
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 in 2002
while
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 began only approximately 38
billion
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minutes
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.
Additionally
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,
the
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apply
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mobiles
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 attracted the majority and became popular in 2002 since the
mobiles
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 increased sharply through each year.
However
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, in 1995 the number of people called
mobiles
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were
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was
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 only 3
billion
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minutes
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, mobiles, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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